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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link=blue vlink=purple style='margin-left:3.0pt;margin-top:3.0pt;margin-right:3.0pt;margin-bottom:.75pt'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>The original text is really quite clumsy, but the problem with the proposed revisions is that it sounds like rules are doing the excluding. They are not; catalogers are doing the excluding on the basis of the rules. Is something like this better? <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>7A1.1. Notes qualify and amplify the formal description, and <s>. They</s> are especially appropriate for recording information <b>not provided for in</b> <s>that rules exclude from</s> other areas of the description.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>That is (in case the bold and strikeout gets stripped)<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>7A1.1. Notes qualify and amplify the formal description, and are especially appropriate for recording information not provided for in other areas of the description.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'> <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-family:"Palatino Linotype","serif";color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><div><div style='border:none;border-top:solid #B5C4DF 1.0pt;padding:3.0pt 0in 0in 0in'><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><b><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif"'>From:</span></b><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Tahoma","sans-serif"'> dcrm-l-bounces@lib.byu.edu [mailto:dcrm-l-bounces@lib.byu.edu] <b>On Behalf Of </b>Karen Meyer-Roux<br><b>Sent:</b> Monday, 23 May, 2011 12:25<br><b>To:</b> DCRM Revision Group List<br><b>Subject:</b> Re: [DCRM-L] DPC: minor wording change to 7A1.1 for clarity<o:p></o:p></span></p></div></div><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><div><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>I find Manon's sentences to be the clearest. Shouldn't the "<strong><span style='font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>may</span></strong>" be omitted though, to keep in line with the more direct meaning of the original sentence Erin was working on, so as to have the following: <o:p></o:p></span></p></div><div><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'> <o:p></o:p></span></p></div><div><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>7A1.1. Notes qualify and amplify the formal description. They are<br>especially appropriate for recording information that rules exclude from other areas of the description.<o:p></o:p></span></p></div><div><p class=MsoNormal style='margin:0in;margin-bottom:.0001pt'><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Segoe UI","sans-serif"'>Karen<br><br>>>> Manon Theroux <manon.theroux@gmail.com> 5/21/2011 9:55 AM >>><br>The DCRM(B) sentence is a carryover from DCRB. I never found it<br>confusing. But, I guess some do? Responding to Lenore's suggested<br>wording:<br><br><br><o:p></o:p></span></p></div></div></body></html>