[DCRM-L] DPC: minor wording change to 7A1.1 for clarity

[Deborah J. Leslie]

The original text is really quite clumsy, but the problem with the
proposed revisions is that it sounds like rules are doing the excluding.
They are not; catalogers are doing the excluding on the basis of the
rules. Is something like this better?   

7A1.1. Notes qualify and amplify the formal description, and . They are
especially appropriate for recording information not provided for in
that rules exclude from other areas of the description.

 

That is (in case the bold and strikeout gets stripped)

 

7A1.1. Notes qualify and amplify the formal description, and are
especially appropriate for recording information not provided for in
other areas of the description.

 

From: dcrm-l-bounces at lib.byu.edu [mailto:dcrm-l-bounces at lib.byu.edu] On
Behalf Of Karen Meyer-Roux
Sent: Monday, 23 May, 2011 12:25
To: DCRM Revision Group List
Subject: Re: [DCRM-L] DPC: minor wording change to 7A1.1 for clarity

 

I find Manon's sentences to be the clearest.  Shouldn't the "may" be
omitted though, to keep in line with the more direct meaning of the
original sentence Erin was working on, so as to have the following:  

 

7A1.1. Notes qualify and amplify the formal description. They are
especially appropriate for recording information that rules exclude from
other areas of the description.

Karen

>>> Manon Theroux <manon.theroux at gmail.com> 5/21/2011 9:55 AM >>>
The DCRM(B) sentence is a carryover from DCRB. I never found it
confusing. But, I guess some do? Responding to Lenore's suggested
wording:




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